Wednesday, 9 September 2015

Image Prompts

Description: I have to summarise this picture using my own words and opinion.

 Opinion: I think that it would be extremely fun because you are flying in the air with other people. They are wearing rainbow colored clothes and that is the effect they might be aiming for. This picture is really awesome because of the circle beneath them. This relates to your learning because its never to be afraid to try something new and take a risk. It also means to put yourself in the learning pit. I think if you have never done this before and you were doing it. You would really be putting yourself in the learning pit.


Writing Portfolio Post

Description: In writing we based what we wrote on a picture that we were given. We were given a picture of a cat in a cage and the bird sitting on top. We had to write a story telling about what we thought about it, including the five senses.


Evaluation: I think I really finished my writing to the best standard I could. I think I learned a lot about using descriptive words and paragraphs in my writing to hook the reader. I think I achieved my goal. I also used a new template to help plan my writing. I think that new plan helped me a lot and gave me options of what I was going to write about.

Feedback/Feedfoward:   
Great job Rosalind you have used lots of descriptive words to add lots of impact.  Next time I think that you could add a range of short and long sentences. Great job I love your writing! Hannah K:) 

The Learning: We have been learning to use descriptive words to hook the reader. I have also been learning to put paragraphs, so that it is easy to read. My Goal is to use a different plan to help create my writing and get the main points. I have used a mountain plan this time and it helped a lot because it helped me think more about what the problem was going to be and planning a beginning, middle and end. Beneath is my writing that is the finished piece. There is also a picture of the mountain plan.

















Big idea:

Trapped

Earlier outside the house, the tabby cat was smoking. The bird sat on the trampoline, planning his revenge. Not long ago the bird had jumped as something hit his side. A burn ran all through his body. He knew who had done it, straight away. It was time for payback. 

Swooping down came the bird, he was yelling " HELP, HELP "! Gian slippers came stomping and big hairy hands came and picked up the cat and shoved the cat in the cage.

Now the cat was in the cage with the bird perched proudly on top. The key was trapped in the birds beak. The cat's ears flattened  and his tail flicked sharply every second. There was a smell like a heater burning dust, and smoke was appearing around the corner of the wall. 

The bird screeched and dropped the key. It made a clanking noise as it hit the glass table. 
But there wa still a problem. The cat could not pick up the key to open the heavy metal padlock. BANG the kitchen door closed and the bird passed through the window with a wink.

Monday, 7 September 2015

Pae Tamariki Reflection Term 3 2015

Description: Pae Tamariki happened Term 3, Friday 31, July. It was a performance at the regent. It was an amazing experience. I think we did really well and that our performances were great. This performance was for celebrating Pae Tamariki. It was not a competition it was a way to share our songs.





Big Idea: 

At Pae Tamariki, I felt: pleased that I represented RSS because I think we performed a great performance.



I felt most pleased of: How we worked as a group to make the songs the best we could.


I found the first song challenging because: we had to sing really high to get the tone and tune right.


I managed this challenge by working together to sing it smoothly.


At Kapa Haka, I next want to: Stay in time with the other people and be confident on stage.


Feedback/Feedfoward: I think you did really well in your performance but you can work on your high notes. Katelyn:)